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Re: New Welcome Post! Feedback Appreciated!

Posted: Mon Apr 09, 2018 10:51 pm
by Eurydice

I'm the poor sap Muldar roped into proofreading this post. It seems I've shamefully missed out apostrophes in points #5 + #7, and the comma missing from #4, so cheers for catching those (the beautiful Scottish sun must have been in my eyes!).

The comma in fragments #2 and #3 is a matter of personal preference. It works with either, and I felt it had a much stronger flow with the comma instead of the full stop. #6 appears to have just been a typo however, easy mistake to fix!

Not really sure what the issue is with fragment #1, looks solid to me!

Thanks for the comprehensive response!
You did a great job :D

Also I hope y'all wear kilts. Also pics! Please ❤️

Re: New Welcome Post! Feedback Appreciated!

Posted: Mon Apr 09, 2018 10:59 pm
by Arken
You did a great job :D

Also I hope y'all wear kilts. Also pics! Please ❤️
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Weather is still too cold right now for kilts, the sunny day we just had was an anomaly and I fully expect another month of snow to really send winter off with a bang!

Re: New Welcome Post! Feedback Appreciated!

Posted: Mon Apr 09, 2018 11:03 pm
by Muldar
I'm the poor sap Muldar roped into proofreading this post.
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Re: New Welcome Post! Feedback Appreciated!

Posted: Mon Apr 09, 2018 11:30 pm
by Dark Kitty
#6 appears to have just been a typo however, easy mistake to fix!
#6:
The first thing to do is submit an in-game Support Ticket, found by tapping the Support tab in-game, Support Tickets are directly linked to your account and are generally resolved faster than via the forums.
Hi Arken! Correct me if I'm wrong, but I believe there is a comma splice in the first or second comma depending on preference.

I also found some additional excerpts.
While all of our clan view the forum daily (and may pop in to discussions now and again) my role as Community Manager is to be a direct link between players and our development team.
I believe this is a run-on sentence.
The support hub will be the place to go for minor support requests, questions to the community and reporting any bugs you've found on your travels of Dal Riata.
The third phrase should be a noun and should have a comma after community.
This hub contains our busiest sub forums; General Discussions, Announcements, Off Topic and Feedback & Suggestions.
I believe the semicolon should be a colon.
Feedback and Suggestions is the best way to make sure your opinions and ideas are heard by the team, we read this daily and all feedback is appreciated!
Comma splice
First you need to select the correct subforum from the overview above, this is important as it allows us to keep discussion going and ensures your post is seen by the correct audience.
Comma splice
Our Support Team are always happy to help with any inquiry you may have, please make sure your ticket contains all relevant info as this will speed up the process.
Comma splice
In discussions you will see several different coloured names. Administrators, Moderators, Guides and Users.
I believe this is preference, but I would suggest to consider changing the period into a colon.

Cheers

Re: New Welcome Post! Feedback Appreciated!

Posted: Tue Apr 10, 2018 12:56 am
by Mind
:D Glad I'm not the only one bothering to be nit-picky (jk, love it).

Also:
Q: Where I can find guides and help?
This could either end with a period to be a statement or be changed to "can I" to make more sense as a question.

Re: New Welcome Post! Feedback Appreciated!

Posted: Tue Apr 10, 2018 9:30 am
by Arken
#6 appears to have just been a typo however, easy mistake to fix!
#6:
The first thing to do is submit an in-game Support Ticket, found by tapping the Support tab in-game, Support Tickets are directly linked to your account and are generally resolved faster than via the forums.
Hi Arken! Correct me if I'm wrong, but I believe there is a comma splice in the first or second comma depending on preference.

I also found some additional excerpts.
While all of our clan view the forum daily (and may pop in to discussions now and again) my role as Community Manager is to be a direct link between players and our development team.
I believe this is a run-on sentence.
The support hub will be the place to go for minor support requests, questions to the community and reporting any bugs you've found on your travels of Dal Riata.
The third phrase should be a noun and should have a comma after community.
This hub contains our busiest sub forums; General Discussions, Announcements, Off Topic and Feedback & Suggestions.
I believe the semicolon should be a colon.
Feedback and Suggestions is the best way to make sure your opinions and ideas are heard by the team, we read this daily and all feedback is appreciated!
Comma splice
First you need to select the correct subforum from the overview above, this is important as it allows us to keep discussion going and ensures your post is seen by the correct audience.
Comma splice
Our Support Team are always happy to help with any inquiry you may have, please make sure your ticket contains all relevant info as this will speed up the process.
Comma splice
In discussions you will see several different coloured names. Administrators, Moderators, Guides and Users.
I believe this is preference, but I would suggest to consider changing the period into a colon.

Cheers
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Re: New Welcome Post! Feedback Appreciated!

Posted: Wed Apr 11, 2018 10:52 am
by offiues
Looks great!